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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of five types of
energy
production
 in France in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, in both years, the most significant sources of
energy
 were gas and coal, which together accounted for over half the
production
 of
energy
,
while
 nuclear and other kinds of
energy
 sources generated the least amount of
energy
 in France. In all types of
energy
production
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 there was only minimal change over the
10 year
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 period.
Energy
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 produced by coal comprised
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29.80% in the first year and
this
 showed only a very slight increase of about a mere 1% to 30.9% in 2005.
Likewise
, in 1995, gas generated 29.63% which rose marginally to 30.1% 10 years later. With regards to the remaining methods of producing
energy
, there was an approximate 5% growth in
production
 from both nuclear power and other sources to 10.10% and 9.10 % respectively. Petrol,
on the other hand
, was the only source of
energy
 which decreased in
production
 from 29.27 % in 1995 to around a fifth in 2005 .
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