The line graph shows the percentage of employment in 3 sections from 1970 to 1995.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of people who have jobs in three categories between 1970 and 1995.

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, employment rates have fluctuated

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the graph. With the

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employ

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amount

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were the highest in sector

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and the lowest in sector A. In 1970, section

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of the employment amount was the highest, slightly over 90%, compared to about 88% of unit

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was slightly increased.

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, the figure for the job in

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A was the lowest, around 18%. In 1980, there was a

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went down in sections

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and

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of work,

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about 57% and 58% respectively. By 1985, the percentage of occupation in

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increased dramatically, reached its peak at 92%. At the same time, there was

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increased to 72% in section

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. Meanwhile, section

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slowly dropped by 18% to its lowest point

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3%. In 1990, the number of people who were employed in

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and

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crashed substantially, roughly 92% and 72%, respectively.

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rose moderately, at 10%.