The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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According to

this

graph, the number of men and women in

further

education

in Britain shows

that

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the

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following style. In the case of males, the number of males

has

Unnecessary verb

apply

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decreased from about 100

thousands

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thousand

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in 1970/1971 to about 850

thousands

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thousand

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in 1990/1991.

However

this

figure

rises back to about 850

thousands

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thousand

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in 1990/1991 from about 820

thousands

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thousand

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in 1980/1981. The proportion of full-time

education

has decreased during

this

period.

However

, the proportion of part-time

education

has increased dramatically.

On the other hand

, in the case of females, the number of both full-time

education

and part-time

education

has increased during the period. From about 700

thousands

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thousand

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in 1970/1971, these figures rose to about 820

thousands

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thousand

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in 1980/1981, to about 1100

thousands

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thousand

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in 1990/1991. In terms of full-time

education

this

figure

rises by about 260 to about 900 in 1990/1991.

On the other hand

, with respect to part-time

education

this

figure

raised a lot between 1980/1981 and 1970/1971.

However

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,However

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this

figure

rises

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little bit between 1980/1981 and 1990/1991.

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