The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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According to

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graph, the number of men and women in

further

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education

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in Britain shows

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following style. In the case of males, the number of males

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decreased from about 100

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in 1970/1971 to about 850

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in 1990/1991.

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rises back to about 850

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in 1990/1991 from about 820

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in 1980/1981. The proportion of full-time

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has decreased during

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period.

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, the proportion of part-time

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has increased dramatically.

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, in the case of females, the number of both full-time

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and part-time

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has increased during the period. From about 700

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in 1970/1971, these figures rose to about 820

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in 1980/1981, to about 1100

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in 1990/1991. In terms of full-time

education

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this

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figure

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rises by about 260 to about 900 in 1990/1991.

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, with respect to part-time

education

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this

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figure

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raised a lot between 1980/1981 and 1970/1971.

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this

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little bit between 1980/1981 and 1990/1991.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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5 paragraphs

166 words

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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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