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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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a table, revealing
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 of four
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 of fuel utilization for electricity purposes in five Asian countries in 2005.    
Overall
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 in all countries the way they get
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 differs from each other.   
To begin
 with, nuclear is widely used by nearly half (49%) of
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while
 it was never utilized in Thailand.
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 mainly used in Malaysia and Singapore that accounted for sixty-one and forty-two respectively.    
However
, the main source of electricity has become petroleum in Thailand  (36%)
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 it is much lower in other countries around 2-3%.     
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, 48% of Koreans utilized water and wind for
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while
 nuclear is regarded latter endemic means of fuel in practice (33%).     Apart from the aforementioned types of fuels, there was
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 another way to be provided with electricity that 42% of Thai use followed by 39% of Singaporeans and
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