The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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household
energy
usage contributed to the number of emitted greenhouse gases in Australia. Overview, the use of gas in heating is obvious that a majority proportion of how the power had been used in housework.
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heating follows
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similar trend in
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Australian household polluted gas emissions. For the power consumption within households, heating purposes stand ahead of the rest with up to 72% of all uses which is shown in
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as 42% and 30% for normal heating and water heating, respectively. Comparatively, the uses of
energy
in cooling objectives are relatively low.
Cooling
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process uses only two
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of all
energy
consumed,
while
refrigeration takes 7%. Regarding the use of
energy
in Australia, Greenhouse gases are emitted. Following the logic, heating processes lead to the largest number of gas
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at 47% when normal and water heating are all included.
However
, the use of
energy
in refrigerators causes a larger percentage of emissions than expected. It produces 14
percent
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of the gases which lead to greenhouse effects
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while
cooling progress remains the same as a small number at 3%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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