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The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart and table
illusrate
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illustrate
illustrates
that
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apply
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the past, present and future
population
 of
japan
 from 1950 to 2055,
ratio
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the ratio
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 of
population
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the population
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 aged 65 years or above in
millions
. In starting
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the
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year
of
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apply
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1955,
the
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Japan
's
population
 was only 84.1
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million
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millions
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million
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 as the years
passing
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passed
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 the
population
also
increasing
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increased
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 till 2015.
During
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From
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 1995 to 2015
the
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Japan
's
population
 increased almost by 41
millions
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million
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,
however
 from 1990 to 2015 there is increasing in
population
 but
very
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a very
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 slow rate as
compare
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compared
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 to 1950 to 1995.
Therefore
, after
the
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2015
Japan
's
population
 start
declaine
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decline
 till 2055 at
very
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a very
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 high rate from 124.4 to 89.9
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million
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millions
.
On the other hand
,
Japan
's
population
 aged 65 years or higher
keep
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keeps
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 improving from 1950 to 2055 by 4.1 to 36.5
millions
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million
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, as
compare
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compared
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 in ratio its almost only 4.1% of
total
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the total
a total
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population
 of
japan
 in 1955 but in 2055 it is 41
percent
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per cent
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. In general,
There
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there
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 are clearly
observe
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observed
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 in
bar
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the bar
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chat
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chart
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 that
Population
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the Population
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 of
japan
 is increasing in past ,
decrease
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decreasing
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 in future and
almost
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is almost
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 constant at present. People whose age is 65 and above
are
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apply
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keep increasing from 1955 to 2055.

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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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