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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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After studying
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 is the most important question in modern life. While we're joining a
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 somewhere, some people got success in getting
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jobs, whatever
 they want while some of the people failed in achieving a post what they want. Here some people think post satisfactions are more important because they believe quality
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 is only possible when a man doing a
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 in which he is mastermind to perform
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this task
these tasks
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, an astronomer is capable of doing a research in the field of space science, planets and star. If the astronomer is appointed
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 research in the field of electrical power,
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 performance quality is never going to be happens. It is possible an astronomer has a lack of knowledge of the electrical power stream. He will be never does
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this job
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 properly. For that reason
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 comfort is more desirable. Now the other side few people think we will have to secure our
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. Nowadays to securing a
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 is hard because of competition. At that time eighty percent of the field was fulfilled with the competitive nature and it is happening, we will fail in achieving a post what we wanted. So some of the people believe
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 security is more important than jobless life. I concede
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 comfort plays a major role. Because merit of
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fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
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 is there. But
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 security is good things. When we will have failed in
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 satisfaction,
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 we must secure our
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, after that we can try again to secure our
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 what we want. In
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 method we are not wasting our time to making the money.

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