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Criminal conviction in the UK by age and gender. Gender of prison inmates in the UK

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The given pictures reveal how many male and female are prison and their crime rates compare by age in the UK. Overall, it is clearly seen that much of the violence is happening by male, so that they are prison more than female. If we look at the details, we can see about the highest rates of male convictions. Originally, criminals are happened by 10 span's man 2%. After that,
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 index rise sharply to 20 age and
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 point are 16%. But
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 ages, which are from 20 to 60 rates of criminals decreasing considerably and final point, it's rates are 2% like 10year's old male. So that, 96% of prisons are In prison with high rates.
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, females are happening
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 violence, but their rates are the least. So that, only 4% of all of the whole prisoner are females. 10 breadth's old females haven't any balances. But at 20 period's old females happen criminals the highest rates as much as a man. But
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 age females, which are from 20 to 60 their criminal rates decrease exponentially. And final point it is nearly 0%.
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