The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates information concerning the average number of
hours
that
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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spend per
week
on
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doing seven activities at home.
Overall
,
men
spends
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most of
the
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time
to watch
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television,
while
the
most
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favourite activity of women is cooking. The figure
also
clearly shows that both genders spent the least of their
time
on
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gardening. There was a significant difference in
time
spending
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for using
internet
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between
two
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groups.
Men
spend most of their
time
on
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watching Television, which accounted
14
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hours
per
weeks
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. They
also
spent
time
on
internet
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higher than
time
to cook
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, which
were
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12
hours
per
weeks
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and 8
hours
per
weeks
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respectively.
Men
had an average
time
on the remaining activities outlay between 2 to 5
hours
.
On the other hand
, the largest amount of
time
was
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spent by women was used to preparing
foods
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(15
hours
per
week
).
Likewise
, they
also
spend 12
hours
per
weeks
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to watch
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television. Within a
week
, women
also
spend
time
nearly 5 to 6
hours
on chores, which were
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up and cleaning
house
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as well as
other leisure
activity
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, namely reading
at
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an average
5
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of 5
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hours
.
In addition
, they spend the lowest amount of their
time
at 1 hour per
week
on gardening, which
nearly
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the same amount as that of
men
(2
hours
per
week
).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, men, time, weeks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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