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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The chart indicates some essential sectors, namely petroleum
products
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, engineered goods, gems and jewels, agricultural
products
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 and textile export goods which
is
Unnecessary verb
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contributed exportation impress of
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the
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government throughout 2015 and 2016.
Overall
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, it is brilliantly clear that
,
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 the most tremendous rates
are
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apply
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followed
the
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by the
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 petroleum and
engineer
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engineering
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 sectors as
opposite
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opposed
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 to the three
others
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other
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 parts depicted lower exportation except
of
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apply
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gems
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the gems
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 and jewellery sector from 2015 to 2016 years.The chart information gives us
advantageous
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advantages
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 that predict the ascended part of exportation in the future.
According to
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 the indicators, it is obviously clear that
the
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apply
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petroleum
products
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 had increased a minority percentages
as well as
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 agricultural unit rates,
in
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on
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contrary
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the contrary
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, gems and jewellery
products
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 got a downward trend these years.
In addition
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,
the
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apply
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tremendous differences had observed engineered goods and textiles
component
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components
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according to
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 enlarged export rates
one
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of one
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 in ten and over fifteen
percentages
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per cent
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 corresponding part both of them during 2015 and 2016 years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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