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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that,in today's world,subjects like science and technology are more important than history.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Primary education plays a very important role in a
child
's
life
. A
child
 should have basic
knowledge
 about each and every area of
life
 which help the
child
 in
further
life
. Undoubtedly, today's
life
 is all about
technology
 and different inventions of science. Before reaching to a conclusion both opinions will be discussed. Admittedly, today's
era
 is all about new inventions and handling
technology
, due to which parents want their
child
 to excel in science field.
Moreover
, the children feel boring cramming different names and dates, which
also
 kills their creativity. It is believed that according to the increase in
technology
, soon the
era
 will be of robots. Parents see bright future for the students in the science stream. On the flip side, if we take a look on the other phase of society, they say that the
child
 should have
knowledge
 about our origin, which I think is important. History being a non-practical field teachers use conventional methodology due to which history sounds boring subject. In spite of
this
, we should
have
Suggestion
Has
Have
knowledge
 about what we have suffered and sacrificed to reach till
this
 position along with how different civilisation, dynasties as well as kingdoms have an impact on us. If not in detail a
child
 should have basic
knowledge
 ad should know about the religions. To conclude,unquestionably, today's
era
 and coming
era
 is all baout
technology
 but knowing about our past together with about our precious culture is
also
 equally importont to know
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