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The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources of greenhouse gas in the UK between 1990 and 2010.

The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources of greenhouse gas in the UK between 1990 and 2010.
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Given is a graph reviewing collected data germane to three dissimilar emission sources of greenhouse
gas
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 in the UK through the span of two decades from 1990 to 2010. As per the graph, what is interesting to note is that
emissions
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 from
gas
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 witnessed
gradual
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 upward trend
whereas
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, coal illustrated a downward trend. Oil saw fluctuation over the period. As for
gas
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, over the whole period,
gas
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 showed a gradual escalation and the figure
of
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for
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 the
emissions
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 from
gas
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 stood
210
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at 210
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 thousand
tons
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 in 1990 and gained its peak at 310 bank
tons
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 in 2010. Turning to the details of coal, the
emissions
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 from coal tumbled markedly from roundly 310 lot
tons
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 to 190 sum
tons
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 over the two decades. When it comes to the
emissions
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 from oil, the figure experienced a fluctuation still 2000
however
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, there was a slow decline in carbon
emissions
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 from 2000 to 2010 with 250 and
200 ton
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200-ton
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tons
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oil
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of oil
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emissions
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, respectively.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, emissions, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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