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The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
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The
bar
chart
 illustrates how the top ten countries produce and consume electricity
in2014
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in 2014
.
According to
 the
bar
chart
 of rank
country
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countries
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, China and
United
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the United
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 States are
the
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at the
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 top of electricity
consumption
 and
production
. The
consumption
 of
US
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the US
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 is under 4000
billion
kwh
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kWh
while
 the
production
 surpasses just 4000
billion
kwh
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kWh
.
Likewise
, the
production
 of China,
which
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apply
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 is about 5000
billion
kwh
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kWh
, which is about 5400
billion
kwh
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kWh
. The rest of
countries
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the countries
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 show under 1000
billionkwh
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billion kWh
billionth
, except for
Russian
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Russia
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 which is located at the exact 1000kwh in
consumption
 and more in
production
. In the axis title, China and
United
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the United
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 States lead at most in
consumption
 and
production
 and the rest happen as usual in sequence, like
above
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in
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 the
bar
chart
. But there is in version about both kinds in that the amount of
consumption
 is more than
production
.
By comparison
 of both
sorts
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,sorts
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 the
consumption
 of the
bar
chart
 is always exceeded and similarities, the amount of
production
 does more in the axis title.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, chart, consumption, production, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hour (MWh)
  • capacity
  • output
  • distribution
  • consumption
  • production
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable energy
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • trend
  • pattern
  • discrepancy
  • regional
  • anomaly
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