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big salary is much more important than job satisfaction do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
It is often argued that having a career that offers high income is way better than being happy with your
work
.
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement because I think people that are happy with their task is greater than having high wage
job
.
First
 of all,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that being happy with your own
job
 can give you more motivation more than money that you can get.
if
Suggestion
If
 people are happy with their
job
, they are likely to be more motivated and
work
 hard every day.
Also
, their hard
work
 can pay off with great result,
such
as
Suggestion
As
being
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has been
 famous,
rich high
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rich, high
 position and they will be so proud of themselves.
For instance
, a South Korean boy band named BTS they were not famous when they just debuted and they received little money, but
then
 because of their passion about being singers and dancers, they kept on trying to persuade their dream and they're happy with it after many years of trying with their motivation and their hard
work
,
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,
 Now they have become the biggest boy band in 2020.
it
Suggestion
It
 is the fact that have a happy
job
 will really give you more motivation to your everyday life.
Secondly
, people that happily
work
 tends to be less
pressure
 than having a high salary
job
.
Accept space
.
if
Suggestion
If
 you keep on doing things that don't make you happy, it will give you more
pressure
 even you get
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of money and you will not be excited about it. Being happy with your own
job
 is the best thing you will ever have because happy
job
 will give you less stress and less
pressure
.
for
Suggestion
For
 example, Namjoon he is a rapper and he was once working at a company because he is smart his company offered him a high
salary but
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salary, but
then
 he still left the company and follow his dream as a rapper and being stress-free from his old
job
.
Accept space
.
it
Suggestion
It
 is true that task satisfaction will give you less
pressure
 than a high wage
job
. in conclusion, i believe that
job
 satisfaction is much better than high salary
job
 because it give you less pressurre and being more motivated

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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