The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

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The given diagrams depict the information about the steps and equipment used in the

cement - making

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cement-making

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process and

also

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process

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the process

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of concrete production of the cement.

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, for

the

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apply

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adhesive

manufacture

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,manufacture

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there are 4 steps

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apply

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apply

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crushing, mixing, heating,

grinding

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and grinding

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whereas

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, for

the

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apply

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concrete construction there is only one process where all ingredients are added to the concrete food processor. First of all, the major ingredient for

the

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apply

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plaster manufacture is limestone and clay and these products are crushed to form

its

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powder.

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step is,

this

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powder is added to

blender

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the blender

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machine where it mixes and

move

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moves

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forward to

rotating

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the rotating

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heater. After heating the mixture, it passes to

grinder

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the grinder

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machine to chop and grind

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into

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tiny pieces and

then

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adhesive is formed.

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this

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sand is packed in bags.

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of all,

sand

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and

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is used in concrete management.

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, 15% of adhesive and 10% of water is added to the concrete mixer.

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to these, 25% of sand and 50% of gravel is added to the mixer.

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food processor will mix all basic

material

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materials

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to form concrete which is used for building purposes.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Topic Vocabulary:

construction
cement-making
raw materials
crushing
mixing
heating
grinding
cement powder
packaging
distribution
concrete
versatility
strength
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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Some people consider prices as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (eg. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree

Write a letter to a friend to inform him/her about a job opening in your company. Describe the job; 1) write about the job. 2) How is it suitable for your friend? 3) How to apply for the job.

In many countries, people like to eat a lot of food that cannot be grown in their local area. As a result, much of the food that people consume from other countries. Do the advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

Most countries aim to improve their standard of living through economic development, but many important social values can be lost as a result. Do the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

In the future, nobody will buy printed nwespapers or books because they will be able to read everything they wnat online without paying. To what extenddo you agree or disagree with this statement.