the chart below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following pie chart
illustrate
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the proportion of
water
used for different needs namely :
industry
,
agriculture
, and domestic
use
in six
regions
of the world.
Water
usage varies a lot across
regions
.
For instance
, in North
America
and
Europe
,
zater
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water
later
is mainly used for
industry
while
in
Africa
, South East
Asia
, Central
Asia
and South
America
water
is mainly used for
agriculture
. In
Europe
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,Europe
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53% of
water
is used for
industry
.
In contrast
, North
America
uses 5% less
water
compared
for
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their
industry
. But North
America
uses more
water
than
europe
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Europe
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for
agriculture
zhich
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which
each amount
of
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39% and 32% respectively.
Also
, the domestic
use
of
water
is slightly different in these two
regions
where North
America
use
13%
zhich
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which
is 2% lesser than that of
the
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Europe
. Contrarily, in South
America
,
Africa
, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
, at least 71% of
water
is used for
agriculture
.
While
South
America
used 19% of
water
for domestic
purpose
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,
Africa
, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
used no more than 9% of the
water
for the same
use
.
Finally
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industrial
use
of
water
varies a lot across these four
regions
precisely 5% for Central
Asia
, 7% for
Africa
, 10% for South
america
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, and 12%
South
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East
Asia
.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, industry, agriculture, use, regions, america, europe, africa, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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