In many schools and universities today, women have a tendency to study the humanities (such as the arts and languages) while men more often major in science related subjects. Some believe this tendency should be changed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today more
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Today, more
and more parents and policymakers are concerned with the disproportionate ratio of males studying
science
relative to females. In my opinion, though there are likely social factors at play here that need addressing, there is little value enforcing
this
change. The main reason that many are striving to remedy
this
imbalance is because they feel it is
societal
Suggestion
society
, not natural. For centuries, women have subjugated their careers and education to male siblings and husbands.
This
has led to a history of mostly male role models in scientific pursuits, with women like Mary Shelly and Frida more likely to shine in the arts. Even today, there is a widespread bias that men are better at
science
that may discourage girls. There have been a number of famous studies
cataloging
a book or pamphlet containing an enumeration of things
cataloguing
the gender imbalance in
science
, with most researchers attributing
this
to social, rather than genetic, factors.
Nonetheless
, heavy-handed efforts to force change
are
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is
detrimental to both men and women. Women who are helped or strongly encouraged to pursue
science
rather than the arts will be less self-reliant and more likely to develop self-esteem problems. A corollary example would be the failure of affirmative action to promote racial equality. Individuals prosper when societal barriers to success are removed and they are given the opportunity to help themselves. If overly strong measures are taken,
such
as a quota of female majors in a given subject, that might place less qualified candidates above more deserving ones and
then
later manifest itself in reduced self-confidence from the unfairly elevated and resentment from those who were passed over. In conclusion, though I am in favour of all reforms to provide for equal educational opportunity for the sexes, attempts to reform a tendency rather than allow for its change will bring about more harm than good. Rather, parents and educators should encourage students to pursue their passions.
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