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Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion

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Over the past decades, gender
aquality
Suggestion
a quality
 has become a debated issue. While many adopt a view that man and women have
same opportunities
Suggestion
the same opportunities
, others argue that they have unequal standards. I strongly believed that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 should be
aknowlegded
recognized or made known or admitted
acknowledged
 some contrasts are still existing. On the one hand, it is true
on
Suggestion
to
certant
definite but not specified or identified
certain
 extent that women and men are both suitable for some types of work which only require about mental capability and
intelligent
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intelligence
. There is no relations between gender and individual ability.
For instance
,
in most of companies
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in most companies
, recruiters tend to
appriciate
recognize with gratitude; be grateful for
appreciate
 base on candidate's knowledge, skill, or
attitute
a complex mental state involving beliefs and feelings and values and dispositions to act in certain ways
attitude
, not only via their gender.
This
 example is a good illustration that as long as they are in harmony with
job's demands
Suggestion
the job's demands
, it is not a problem which is their gender-specific.
On the other hand
, there is no point in denying that individual different characters between men and women is natural and ever-
existant
having existence or being or actuality
existent
.
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