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The table below shows the production of cacao beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998 .

The table below shows the production of cacao beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998 .
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The table illustrates the amounts of
cacao
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 beans that were produced in six global areas in the
year
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 1992, 1994 and 1998.
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,
cacao
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production
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 increased in some areas and decreased in others. South
America
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 and
Asia
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 were the leading producers over the given period.
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,
The
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 significant increase in
cacao
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bean
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production
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 was seen in
Asia
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. Between 1992 and 1998,
the
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cacao
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bean
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production
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 in South
America
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 rose from 1,43,000
tons
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 to 3,89,000
tons
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 and rising trends were
also
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 observed in
Asia
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 and Oceania, with increasing from 1,19,000 to 4,36,000 and from 40,000 to 76,840
tons
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 respectively.
Asia
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also
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 had
the
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 higher output rate
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each year peaking in 1998. The trends for North and Central
America
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, Africa and England fluctuated from 1992 to 1998. Africa and England cut their
cacao
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bean
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production
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 by 4,000 and 7,000
tons
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 respectively, and Africa had the notably lowest figure in 1998.
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, even though, small increases in
production
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 of the coffee
bean
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 were seen in North and Central
America
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, the value remained the same in 1992 and 1998.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cacao, production, america, asia, bean, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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