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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The presented bar chart illustrates information about science qualifications held by individuals in Malaysia and
Singapore
.
Overall
, it can be vividly seen from the given chart many Malaysians leave school exams and they do not have a qualification in science
while
 in
Singapore
 far more students get a
bachelor
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bachelor's
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 diploma. As is evident from the chart
master
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master's
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 degree is equal
both
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in both
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 of these countries with less than 5%.
However
, in terms of
bachelor
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bachelor's
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degree
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degrees
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Singapore
's students comprise 20%
and
Correct word choice
which
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it
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is
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almost
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is almost
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 double
than
Correct word choice
that
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of Malaysians
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Malaysians
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Malaysians'
Malaysian's
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 performance.The figure for the people
leave
Correct pronoun usage
who leave
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 school exams makes up 35% in Malaysia
in contrast
this
 level is less in
Singapore
 with 30%.
Moreover
, the percentage of people
do
Correct pronoun usage
who do
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 not have a qualification in science
make
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makes
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 up
the
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a
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 huge proportion in both of them and they are 65% and 60% in Malaysia and
Singapore
 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words singapore with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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