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The line graph compares usage of daily electricity between winter and summer by hours, while the pie graph illustrates consumption of electricity by house tools. A glance at the graphs reveal that the most of demand is in the winter. Not suprisingly, the heating rooms and water cover the mass majority of the consumption.

The line graph compares usage of daily electricity between winter and summer by hours, while the pie graph illustrates consumption of electricity by house tools. A glance at the graphs reveal that the most of demand is in the winter. Not suprisingly, the heating rooms and water cover the mass majority of the consumption.
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The line
graph
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 compares
usage
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the usage
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 of daily
electricity
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 between
winter
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 and summer by hours,
while
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 the pie
graph
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 illustrates
consumption
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the consumption
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 of
electricity
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 by house
tools
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. A glance at the graphs
reveal
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reveals
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 that the most of demand is in the
winter
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. Not surprisingly, the heating rooms and water occur the mass majority of the consumption.
Firstly
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, as
it
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apply
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can be seen in
first
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the first
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graph
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 revealed that the hourly demand for
electricity
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stand
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stands
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 at
the
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apply
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over 30.000 units in
winter
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. During the day, the usage
decrease
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decreased
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 at
the
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apply
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9:00 am. The highest amount of the unit peaks over the 40.000 between 9:00 pm and 00.00.
Secondly
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, in the summer, the usage, lower than
winter
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 and drew a same line.
According to
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 pie
graph
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, there is much amount
electricity
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 use for heating. Sequentially, the kitchen
tools
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, media
tools
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 and the cleaning are by %17.5, 15 and 15. The heating
tools
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 consume more
electricity
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 than the others.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, electricity, winter, tools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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