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The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.
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It is clear that
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 the number of
visitors
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 to the Pavilion and the Pier increased over the period of 30 years
while
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 the
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 for other attractions in Brighton fell. In 1980, the Festival was one of the most popular attractions for
visitors
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 to England.
Although
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 having the highest percentage at 30% in 1980,
this
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figure
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 had fallen slightly to 28% by the year 2010. The number of
visitors
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 who went to the Gallery stood at 22% in 1980. After 5 years, it reached
the
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 peak of 37%.
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,
this
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figure
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then
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 declined to 20% in 1990. Throughout the remainder of the period, the
figure
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 continued to drop sharply to under 10% in 2010. As
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can be seen from the graph, the proportion of tourists visiting the Pavilion in Brighton had the starting
figure
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 at approximately 25% in 1980. In 1995,
this
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figure
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 reached its highest point at 50% before plunging to 30% in 2010. Despite fluctuations, the proportion of
visitors
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traveling
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 the Pier rose from 10% in 1980 to over 20% in 2010.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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