The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how many
students
have a
university graduation between 1992 and 2006 in terms of gender in Canada.
Remove the article
apply
Overall
, there are
a Change the verb form
is
fluctuality
increasing both Correct your spelling
fluctuation
gender's
college education. Clearly, all these genders' Fix the agreement mistake
genders'
who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
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apply
students
' graduation skyrockets after the milennium
. Correct your spelling
millennium
However
, the most significantly
rising is among Replace the word
significant
the
women Correct article usage
apply
students
, their rate approximately is up
half of the beginning number. When Change preposition
apply
glacing
the rate of male former Correct your spelling
placing
glancing
students
, finally
the rising is more than 20000 after the years. The decreasing graduation of both of them,
starts Remove the comma
apply
at
1994 until Change preposition
in
at
1998. Change preposition
apply
This
is the least number of university degree
both Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
in
female and Change preposition
apply
male
. Fix the agreement mistake
males
After six
years later, the proportion of them, replace Change preposition
Six
to
initiative numbers. Fortunately, women and man prefer continuing their Change preposition
with
universities
, Fix the agreement mistake
university
therefore
after next
six Correct article usage
the next
years
all these Add a comma
,years
degree
has Change the determiner
degrees
rising
significantly. The number of them Change the verb form
risen
peak
Change the verb form
peaks
at
Change preposition
in
the
2006, with the differences of the women Change the article
apply
students
' leader
.Fix the agreement mistake
leaders
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