The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how many
students
have
a
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university graduation between 1992 and 2006 in terms of gender in Canada.
Overall
, there
are
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a
fluctuality
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fluctuation
increasing both
gender's
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genders'
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college education. Clearly, all these genders'
who
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the
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students
' graduation skyrockets after the
milennium
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millennium
.
However
, the most
significantly
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rising is among
the
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women
students
, their rate approximately is
up
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half of the beginning number. When
glacing
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placing
glancing
the rate of male former
students
,
finally
the rising is more than 20000 after the years. The decreasing graduation of both of them
,
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starts
at
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1994 until
at
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1998.
This
is the least number of university
degree
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degrees
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both
in
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female and
male
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males
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.
After six
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years later, the proportion of them, replace
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initiative numbers. Fortunately, women and man prefer continuing their
universities
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,
therefore
after
next
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the next
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six
years
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all these
degree
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has
rising
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significantly. The number of them
peak
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at
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the
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2006, with the differences of the women
students
'
leader
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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