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The pie charts compare the proportion of the trend in using water in six areas all over the world in term of three different categories

The pie charts compare the proportion of the trend in using water in six areas all over the world in term of three different categories
As we can see,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 more than 70%
water
Change preposition
of water
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 usage in Central Asia, Africa, South East Asia and South America
related
Add a missing verb
is related
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 to
agricultural
Replace the word
agriculture
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 and
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
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 distribution
in
Change preposition
for
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this
Linking Words
 purpose is 88% in Central Asia. In
same
Correct article usage
the same
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field
Add a comma
,field
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 less usage is 39% in North America and 32% in Europe.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 0 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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