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The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure provided reveals the figure of female
students
 per 100 male
students
 of developed and developing
countries
, in primary, secondary and tertiary
school
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schools
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 in 1990 and 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen from the provided bar chart that the total of girls in both developed and developing
countries
 saw
the
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a
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 gradual rise as time elapses.
Moreover
, the
amount
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number
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 of girls in developed
countries
 was more than in developing
countries
in
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at
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 all three educational levels. As is shown in
rate
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the rate
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, the total of female learners in primary school increased considerably over a decade from 83 to 87 in developing
countries
,
while
 in developed
countries
 the symbol of
students
 saw slowly rose from 93 to 96 respectively. As for secondary education, showing 72 in 1990,
this
 total of female learners had climbed to 82 in 2000 in developing
countries
,
while
 in developed
countries
this
 sum increased from 98 to 99. With regard to tertiary education, the total of female
students
 in developed
countries
 was
two
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too
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 much higher than in developing
countries
 in both years, showing 105/112 and 66/76 appropriately.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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