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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart illustrates the rate of
money
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 expenditure of four different countries on
books
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 from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
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, the percentage of
money
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 consumption on
books
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 in
Germany
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, France, Italy, and Austria changed significantly and
Germany
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 was the country
spends
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that spends
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 much
money
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 on
books
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most
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apply
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.
Additionally
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, all countries use the
money
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 on
books
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 to increase during the research period. In 1995, the amount of
money
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 spends on
books
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 in
Germany
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 made up 80%, which was higher 15% than that of France. In the following 4 years, both figures went up
at
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to
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 around 90% and 60% respectively.
While
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 the quantities of
book’s
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book
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money
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 in France continued to rise
nearly
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by nearly
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 75% in 2005, the figure for
Germany
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 decreased
at
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to
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 83% in 2003 and climbed once again and reached a peak of approximately 95%. In terms of Italy and Austria, the proportion of
money
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 fluctuated
about
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in
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 using
books
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 in Italy,
whereas
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 there was a slight increase in Austria. From 2001 to 2005, both rates increase dramatically
at
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to
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 51% and 71% respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, books, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending patterns
  • steady increase
  • notable growth
  • highest spending
  • moderate increase
  • significant growth
  • comparative analysis
  • cultural investment
  • economic trends
  • over the period
  • consistently higher
  • between X and Y
  • relative starting point
  • year-on-year increase
  • expenditure on books
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