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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart illustrates the rate of
money
 expenditure of four different countries on
books
 from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
, the percentage of
money
 consumption on
books
 in
Germany
, France, Italy, and Austria changed significantly and
Germany
 was the country
spends
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that spends
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 much
money
 on
books
most
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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.
Additionally
, all countries use the
money
 on
books
 to increase during the research period. In 1995, the amount of
money
 spends on
books
 in
Germany
 made up 80%, which was higher 15% than that of France. In the following 4 years, both figures went up
at
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to
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 around 90% and 60% respectively.
While
 the quantities of
book’s
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book
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money
 in France continued to rise
nearly
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by nearly
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 75% in 2005, the figure for
Germany
 decreased
at
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to
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 83% in 2003 and climbed once again and reached a peak of approximately 95%. In terms of Italy and Austria, the proportion of
money
 fluctuated
about
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in
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 using
books
 in Italy,
whereas
 there was a slight increase in Austria. From 2001 to 2005, both rates increase dramatically
at
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to
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 51% and 71% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, books, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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