In schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects, while boys choose science subjects. Why? Should the trend change

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Nowadays, girls
opt
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are opting
for arts
subjects whereas
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subjects, whereas
boys take up science subjects.
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eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
issue
assay
will analysis reasons behind
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trend and
this
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this
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trend should
changed
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change
or not. In the early days, woman's are confined in the four walls of
house
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the house
a house
houses
. They have only responsibility to give birth a child and take care of
house
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the house
a house
.
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is the prominent reason of choosing arts subjects in order to become a
houswife
a wife who manages a household while her husband earns the family income
housewife
and learn household chores with the assistance of these subjects.
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of
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, parents do not want to incur a big chunk of money on high paid courses because they think when girl married, she goes to her husband's house. All money goes to futile.
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, if they spend
these
denotes a person or thing
this
money on their son, they considered it as an investment.When he
get
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gets
a good job after studying science subjects, the income will add
into
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in
the family's income.
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trend should be changed. Gone are the days when
woman
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a woman
are confined
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is confined
in the houses. Gender discrimination should not come in the way of choosing subjects. In these days, woman's are choosing science subjects and get a high paid job, while men are choosing art subjects and doing
job
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the job
a job
jobs
. To
examplify
be characteristic of
exemplify
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,
sanjiv
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Sanjiv
kumar who
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Kumar, who
Kumar who
comer who
is master chief in India and earn a name and fame. In conclusion, Gender discrimination
are disappearing
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is disappearing
and girls and boys have right to choose subjects according to their interest in their interest.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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