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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #job #satisfaction #security
The line graph illustrates the average daily quantity of
produced
Suggestion
producing
 and spent
oil
 in China from 1982 to 2016 in every 4 years. Overall, it is clearly seen that whereas production of
oil
 had remained steady, the
trend
 of consumption had increased over the years.
First
 of all, the consumption and production were almost the same in the year 1982
with
Suggestion
to
 2
million
 barrels per day. While the demand for the
oil
 remained its position until 1990, supplying of
oil
 had increased by 50% and reached to 3
million
 barrels in 1986 and it stayed the same until 1994.
Moreover
, the country’s
oil
 demand has increased sharply and reached 3.5
million
 barrels roughly in 1994. When we look after 1994, the supplying
trend
 has risen slightly and came to almost 3.2, 3.4 and 3.5 in 1998, 2002 and 2006 respectively. In the meantime, the consumption had experienced a dramatic upward
trend
 from 1994 to 2006. In numbers, it
firstly
sat
put into a certain place or abstract location
set
 to 4
million
 in 1998,
then
 the upward
trend
 rose sharply and reached 5 and above 6
million
 barrels per day in 2002 and 2006 respectively.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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