Scientists believe that in order to protect the environment, people must use less energy in their daily lives. However, most people have not changed the way they live. Why do you think many people have not taken individual action? What could be done to encourage them to take action?

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Energy
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demand has skyrocketed for the
last
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century dramatically. Nowadays humanity is facing a bunch of problems
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as global warming, depletion of the ozone layer, melting of glaciers and etc. Scientists are concerned about the aforementioned environmental problems and ask
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government
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the government
and people to reduce daily
energy
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usage for many years, but, unfortunately, with no effect.
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The reasons
for it and possible ways of fixing the situation will be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
before my own perspective is given. The most apparent reason why people still use excessive amount of
energy
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is the lack of their awareness. Not many know about the grave environmental problem our planet is facing,
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as global warming. Individuals prioritize personal interests over the society and national goals. People continue drive old vehicles, factories and plants use out of date machinery that consumes too
many
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much
energy
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. So,
this
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makes clear, that
government
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should take the issue of the
energy
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consumption into consideration and penalize those who deliberately harm the environment.
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, there are several possible steps that
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government
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governments
the government
must implement in order to motivate people to conserve
energy
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.
For example
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, making the
energy
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efficient alternatives more accessible to all layers of society.
Authorities
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The authorities
should
also
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support companies developing eco-friendly products and technology. Education is
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an important factor and subjects
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as saving
energy
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should be added in a primary school curriculum. In conclusion, I would like to say that the implementation of strict laws
by
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of
the
government
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and the promulgation of knowledge how to save
energy
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amongst
people
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the people
will eradicate the problem of
energy
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use.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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