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Band 4

Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is undeniable that many companies have their own
uniform
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.
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, there are some
people
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 who don't think
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uniform
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a uniform
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 is useful and better than working
with
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in
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privacy
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private
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clothe
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clothes
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.
On the contrary
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, some
people
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 think
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uniform
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uniforms
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is
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are
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 useful and have a lot of
benefit
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benefits
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. From my perspective,
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uniform
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uniforms
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is
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are
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 useful and good for the
company
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 to advertise themselves and for the distribution of the
company
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staffs
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staff
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 and customers.
Likewise
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, there are advantages and disadvantages of wearing a
uniform
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, described in the following paragraph.
First,
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the advantage of the
uniform
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 is decreasing the
confuse
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confusion
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 of
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customer
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customers
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 to separate who is
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customer
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a customer
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 and who is the
organization
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organisation's
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staff
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.
Second,
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the
company
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staff
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 can find their co-worker faster than when they were wearing their privacy
clothe
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clothes
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.
Therefore
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, they can work faster and not waste their time on unnecessary things.
For example
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, they don't have to find accessories that match
with
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apply
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their
clothe
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clothes
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.
Third,
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the
uniform
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 can represent the unity of the
organization
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organisation
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.
Next,
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it can be shown as an advertisement of the
company
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 because
in
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on
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 the
uniform
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 it must have the
company
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 logo and colours. When the
customer
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 sees the
cloth
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cloth,
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 it will remind
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them to
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to
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of
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 the
company
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. There is an argument about the necessity of the
uniform
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 for the
employee
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.
This
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 issue is a significant issue for some
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employee
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employees
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 private
life
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lives
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 it's fine for some
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employee
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employees
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 to let other
people
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 know where they work. But, many
people
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 don't want to tell others which
company
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 they work for their privacy. Every
employee
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 in the same
organization
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organisation
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 has to wear the same
uniform
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. Thereby, everyone looks identical and not unique
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, that
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that
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which
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 can
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be the
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the
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a
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 problem for some job that needs creativity. In conclusion, I have an agreement with the statement that
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uniform
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uniformity
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 has more advantages than disadvantages.
Additionally
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, the
necessary
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necessity
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 of the
uniform
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is
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apply
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depends on the kind of
the
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apply
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companies. If the
company
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 need to separate
between
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apply
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the
staff
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 and
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customer
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customers
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 quickly,
the
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a
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uniform
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 is needed.
In contrast
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, if the
company
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 wants their
staff
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 to be unique and can display more creativity
on
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in
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 their fashionable
clothe
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clothes
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. The
uniform
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must
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does
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 not need
.
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to be worn.
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task-response
Make your aim clear at the start and end. State your view in the first line and repeat in the end.
coherence
Link ideas well. Use words like first, next, also, but, however, and finally to join ideas.
language
Fix big grammar and word use. Use simple, correct form and check plural and verb use.
content
You show your view on uniforms and you discuss both sides.
content
You give ideas like easy to see staff and use of logo in uniform as ad.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unity
  • team spirit
  • dress code
  • professional appearance
  • confidence
  • clients
  • brand identity
  • recognizable
  • individuality
  • personal expression
  • uncomfortable
  • impractical
  • financial burden
  • resistance
  • dissatisfaction
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