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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Although
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 it is sometimes thought that the
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 world countries have a higher liability to fight
climate
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then
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than
 other countries. Others,
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, say that regardless of the developmental level, nations have the same responsibilities to protect outward thighs. In my opinion, I consider that all countries have the same duty to combat
climate
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 changes. On the one hand, some people think that all societies have the same liabilities to protect the environment and I agree.
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, regardless of the developmental level, countries should cooperate and protect the world,
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, improve pollution level and make the planet better for future generations. Take,
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, the United Nations, where different countries cooperate and share methods, information and technologies about pollution and how to protect our world.
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, it is often believed that industrialised nations have a better duty to combat
climate
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 alter. A core part of
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 shift is factories which have emissions,
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 a these have been built by developed countries. By virtue of created countries, many areas are unsuitable for living.
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, advanced nations have a power and resources to fight against the
climate
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 shift and will have more vivid improvements. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I think that as people, we do not exist apart from each other. So, all human share the same home called The Earth and have to protect it with common effort.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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