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Some people have the same time of job throughout their lifetime , while other prefer to change the type of job they do.discuss why people choose to do both and give your opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary era, people want to acquire enough knowledge by changing jobs.
while
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While
 some who might not be receptive to change
reaminn
stay the same; remain in a certain state
remain
 in the same
job
 throughout their
life
.
in
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In
this
 essay I shall discuss both the views and at
last
the superlative of 'little' that can be used with mass nouns and is usually preceded by 'the'; a quantifier meaning smallest in amount or extent or degree
least
 I will give my opinion.
To begin
 with
,
Accept space
,
there are numerous benefits to people have remained same the
job
 throughout their
life
.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
 and foremost, Nowadays
,
Accept space
,
many people want to do identical
work
 throughout their
life
 due to they are very interested to do their
work
.
therefore
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Therefore
, people have
same
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the same work
work
 throughout their
life
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lives
.For an instance, according to survey more than half percentage of people to do
same
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the same work
work
 in their
life
such
 as scientists, doctors and so on.
secondly
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Secondly
,
Accept space
,
if people do
same kind
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the same kind
 of
job
 in their
life
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life, then
then
 which can be
chanced
made or become different in nature or form
changed
 to higher salaries in their
life
 as well as they are set on friendly environment because people have the same type of
job
 throughout their
life
. On the flip side
,
Accept space
,
there are
enromus
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
aromas
 people want to change their jobs within
short period
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a short period
.
firstly many
Accept comma addition
Firstly, many
Firstly many
 folks change their
job
 due to they are not suitable for in
job
 environment as well as they do not
satisfied
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satisfy
 to do
work
in
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on
 the same
job
 of throughout their
life
.
secondly
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Secondly
, Nowadays
,
Accept space
,
the
technology
 has been rapidly increasing by over a past year.
therefore people
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Therefore, people
Therefore people
 keep Change their
job
 in their
life
 through the help of
this
 who can acquire a enough knowledge about new
technology
 equipments.
Moreover
, which helps to get people more experience in their field
.
Accept space
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 which can be
chanced
made or become different in nature or form
changed
 to gain higher salaries.
for
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For
 an illustrates, according to
survey
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a survey
 by times of India 70 percentage people who Change their
job
 for learning new
technology
 in
market
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the market
 and skills. In my opinion, people have changed their
job
 within
limited period
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a limited period
 through
this
 way people can acquire a knowledge about new
technology
 and experience in their
further
life
.
whereas
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Whereas
, people have the identical
job
 throughout their
life
 due to they are very interested to do
work
in
particular
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particular jobs
a particular job
the particular job
job
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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