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Some people think that it is best to save money for example in a bank or savings schemes. Other people feel that money should be spent whenever it is available, discuss these views and reach an opinion on this debate.

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Now, people have very different opinions about whether to spend
money
 or
money
 should be saved in a bank or savings scheme. While most people want to support their financial expenses after getting paid, I believe that it is important to save
money
 because you can take it in case of an emergency. on
t
Suggestion
On
he one hand, we can see that various people reason to justify their decision to spend
money
 quickly.
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Accept comma addition
First, we
First we
an see that most people cannot avoid shopping and spending a sizeable proportion of their income to buy daily necessities
such
 as food, drink and clothing.
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