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Band 2

The line graph demonstrates that the average amount of money females earned as a proportion of male's earnings in the USA from 1975 to 2005.

The line graph demonstrates
that
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the average amount of money females earned as a
proportion
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 of
male's
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 earnings in the USA from 1975 to 2005. The lines represent the age gaps as 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45-54
years
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. Between 1980 and
1985
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1985,
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 the
proportion
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 of
earning
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earnings
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 in every age interval was sharply increasing. After 1985, the
proportion
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 of
women
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are
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were
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 16-24
years
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was
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 slowly increasing. The highest ratio belonged to
women
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 who
are
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were
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 16-24
years
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from
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old from
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 1975 to 2005. The 16-
24
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24-year-old
years
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women
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's weekly earnings became 90% of men's wages between 1986 to 2005.
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,
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 the rate of
women
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 who are 45-54
years
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,
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 is the lowest
proportion
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 from 1975 to 1998. After 1998, the lowest
proportion
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 became
women
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are
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were
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 35-44
years
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until
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old until
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 2005. The 45-
54
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54-year-old
years
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women
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's weekly earnings became 55% of men's wages in 1980.
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, the lowest percentages of every age
gaps
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 were in 1975. After that time, the percentages of every
lines
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stared
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 to increase until 2005.

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task response
You need a short opening that says what the graph shows and a short end line that sums up the main change.
coherence and cohesion
Group data by each age group and note clear trends. Do not repeat the same fact.
task response
Be sure to check dates and numbers so you say correct facts from the graph.
coherence and cohesion
Use small linking words to show the flow, such as First, Next, Also, Finally.
coherence and cohesion
Break the writing into clear parts: intro, overall view, details for each part, and a short end.
content
You show data from all age groups in the graph.
structure
You try to note how the data changes over time.
data
You use many data points from the chart.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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