the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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the percentage of
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in North
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, South
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,
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, Africa, Central
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and South
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.
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there are have 3 different purposes
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industrial treatment, agricultural need and domestic handling. The first pie chart is North
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have 48% of
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industrial, 39%
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agricultural and 13%
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domestic. The
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have 10%, 19% and 71% for industrial, agricultural and domestic respectively. The
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have a deluge for industrial service more than
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, Agricultural and domestic have 32% and 15% respectively. And the remaining 3
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Africa, Central
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and Southeast
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have aided in handling the precipitation are similar. So the
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to benefit monsoon for industrial have 7%, 5% and 12% respective country. For agricultural have 84%, 88% and 81% respectively. And the
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and Southeast
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have 7% equal. In conclusion,
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53% of the
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areas. Central
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than
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. And South
America
have 19% for domestic.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words america, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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