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In many countries, students do not want to study science subjects at university. Why is this happening? What will be the consequences of this for society?

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#writing_correction38 Due to
science
 subjects do not have stimulant for students to study
this
 part of lessons in university,
thus
, in most
nation
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nations
 will be being economic problems in society. The
first
 reveals cause for not studying
science
 subject is shortage tendency. Owing to students will not have a basic security
jobs
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job
 for
future
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the future
. Take
for instance
, a recent graduated in
this
 field fail to find their vocation.
Then
, it is
strongly
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strong
stronger
strongest
 reason to
do not
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do, not
 focus on these subjects.
Furthermore
, that able to remarked is difficult to quite understand
science
 subjects. It is
,
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,
however
,
necessry
absolutely essential
necessary
 to most part of skills,
knowleges
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledges
 and some doing on
routin
an unvarying or habitual method or procedure
routine
rotten
 days.
Then
, if they waste the time for learning and choosing another
subejects
the subject matter of a conversation or discussion
subject
, the myriad of students are getting
the better
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the best
 job and finding
more comfortable situation
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a more comfortable situation
 in their societies. There is ample
to
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of
 evidence that disregarded
science
 subjects influenced economic development a society. Not only does it bring economic
stagnation but
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stagnation, but
 it
also
dependence
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depends
depending
depend
 on the other countries.
For example
, chemistry subjects can help
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in
 making medicines and it
reduce
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reduces
 the cost of it in each country.
Therefore
, not possess notice about
these
denotes a person or thing
this
 subject does have a negative point for countries and it has
bad effect
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a bad effect
bad effects
 because
it
it is
it's
 becoming
fewer
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less
 young versatile workforce related
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to
this
 job. Despite
avoding
stay clear from; keep away from; keep out of the way of someone or something
avoiding
 creating special opportunities in
economiy
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economics
economic
economies
,
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,
it
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likely has
has likely had
 few economic losses. To conclude
this
 essay, is the
motivation
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motivational
 element that stopped to continue
take
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to take
taking
 in
science
 subjects in several countries.
In addition
, in most of countries, these relevant to serious consequence of economy in a society. #writing_correction38

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