Some employers offer their employees subsidized member of gym and sport clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Consider the arguments from both aspects of his possible debate, and reach a conclusion.

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Now a day's many organization provides funds to their worker's with membership of different clubs, thinking that it will keep them fit and in good shape making them more active and effective at
work
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. But, few boss's believe that it does not provide any purpose. In
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essay I would like to express both sides of it with relevant examples.
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, I agree with
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statement as it gives motivation to many employees to join gym or sports clubs which they couldn't join due to its fee. Finance is provided by the employers can be the key, as it
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benefit companies in various ways,
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as it promote motivation among workers to achieve and get
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offer and
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, it keeps employees happy and as we all know any organization can achieve successful only when they have good and targeted workers.
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, in a study it is proven that if workers are given some kind of benefit,
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they tend to
work
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harder to achieve it. The bottom line is, it changes the environment of the
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work place
a place where work is done
workplace
if their employees are happy.
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, workers who join
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this clubs
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this club
these clubs
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benefit's they are more physically and mentally fit. They are more active and efficient at their
work
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.
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, As workers get motivated to join the club and do their favourite activity, it
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also affect
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also affects
their overall health which
keep
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keeps
their mind and body healthy and active, it
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also keep
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also keeps
them from getting sick to different diseases. To summarize, both have its pros and cons, but as per the example I believe it has more pros
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than
cons. Employers who see it does not have any benefits they tend to put more focus on
work
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then
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than
providing additional activity funds which overall
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affect motivation of employees and their health as workers seating in office for long periods without any chance of getting engaged in other cultural activity. So in conclusion, I believe, workers should be provided with subsidized member for gym or sports club.
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