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The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.
#line #oil #production #consumption #china
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 graph are illustrate two lines of
production
 and
consumption
 of
oil
 in China from 1982 to 2006.
firstly
 as
it
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can be seen there
are
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is
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 a range of numbers as regards the
production
 of
oil
 per day
relate
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related
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 to the years of
consumption
. In 1982 the
production
 of
oil
 was 2
millions
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million
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 and it rose gradually till 1986,
instead
 the line of
consumption
 was quite stable till 1990.
On the other
hand
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 the
production
 of
oil
begun
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began
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 stable at 3
millions
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million
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 from 1986 till 1994, when the line of
consumption
was
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rose overcoming the
productions
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production
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furthermore
 as is
show
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shown
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 the
consumption
was grow
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grew
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 gradually till 2006, to the difference
of
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in
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 the line of
production
 that in 1994 rose till 3
millions
 of
oil
 and
then
 it remained stable at little more of 3
millions
 of
oil
product
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production
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 per day. In
brief
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 we can confirm that both lines started from almost the same value but the
consumption
are
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 grown
while
 the
production
 remained stable.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, oil, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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