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The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.
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 graph are illustrate two lines of
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
oil
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 in China from 1982 to 2006.
firstly
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 as
it
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apply
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can be seen there
are
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 a range of numbers as regards the
production
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 of
oil
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 per day
relate
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 to the years of
consumption
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. In 1982 the
production
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 of
oil
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 was 2
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millions
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 and it rose gradually till 1986,
instead
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 the line of
consumption
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 was quite stable till 1990.
On the other
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hand
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 the
production
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 of
oil
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begun
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began
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 stable at 3
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millions
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million
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 from 1986 till 1994, when the line of
consumption
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was
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rose overcoming the
productions
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production
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furthermore
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 as is
show
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shown
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 the
consumption
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was grow
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 gradually till 2006, to the difference
of
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in
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 the line of
production
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 that in 1994 rose till 3
millions
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 of
oil
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 and
then
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 it remained stable at little more of 3
millions
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 of
oil
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product
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production
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 per day. In
brief
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 we can confirm that both lines started from almost the same value but the
consumption
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are
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 grown
while
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 the
production
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 remained stable.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, oil, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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