The line graph below shows the number of monthly active users of some social network and messaging services between 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of monthly active users of some social network and messaging services between 2010 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph represents monthly active
users
of social media and messaging
service
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services
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over a six-year period from 2010 to 2015.
Overall
, all platforms gain
their
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popularity after their launch.
Moreover
, Facebook is the most used platform among all and its
users
grow linearly over the period of time. Twitter and Facebook started gaining their names in 2010, but
difference
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the difference
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in the number of
users
increases from 600 million to almost 1300
millions
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million
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. Facebook
users
rose almost 250 % from 600 million to 1600
millions
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million
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. Twitter
users
rose steadily from almost none to almost 300
millions
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million
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in 2015.
In addition
, Twitter
users
plateaued in the time frame of 2014 to 2015. WeChat started gaining
users
in 2011 and increased almost linearly to 750 million.
Number
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of WhatsApp
users
started increasing in 2013 from 400
millions
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million
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to 950
millions
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million
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in 2015. WhatsApp
users
grew
sharply
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more sharply
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than WeChat and Instagram.
Also
, WhatsApp
users
showed a sharp increase rate from 2013 to 2014 and got doubled.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words users, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • monthly active users
  • social network services
  • messaging services
  • time frame
  • observe a trend
  • fluctuation
  • noticeable increase
  • significant decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • exponential growth
  • relative decline
  • steady rise
  • dramatic fall
  • comparative analysis
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