The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the normal proportions of several meals which consist of nutrients that can cause unhealthy if eaten very much.
Overall
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, sodium,
saturated
Correct word choice
and saturated
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fat find the largest proportions in supper. Where added sugar is most used in snacks.
However
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, these three nutrients less
use
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used
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in
breakfast
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and more during dinner. At
breakfast
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and snacks, sodium is used in equal proportions which
are
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is
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about 14
percentage
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per cent
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where it is mostly used in dinner more than
two-fifth
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two-fifths
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.
However
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, only less than one-
third
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is used at lunch.
Moreover
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, the highest usage is saturated fat found at dinner at
about
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apply
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more than one-
third
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where it
used
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is used
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in the lowest portion at
breakfast
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. On the flip side, added sugar is more popularly used as snacks
more
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for more
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than
two-fifth
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two-fifths
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. Added sugar finds 2nd most percentage at supper, which is less than one-fourth. But at the time
of
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apply
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breakfast
Use synonyms
and lunch, it uses less than one-fifth portion.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, third".
Vocabulary: Replace the words breakfast with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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