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The line diagram shows the demand of electricity in winter and summer for a particular city. the pie chart shows the percentage of electricity use in the households. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line diagram shows the demand of electricity in winter and summer for a particular city. the pie chart shows the percentage of electricity use in the households. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs show how during the winter the demand for
electricity
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 is higher than in summer. If we carry out an in-depth analysis we can see during the nights in winter, the units of
electricity
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 raise compared to all daily hours.
On the other hand
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, the energy increase is notorious
at
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for
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 half-day hours and night in summer. It is important to mention the main activities that
electricity
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 is used for are heating rooms and heating water
that
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which
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 embraces more than half of
electricity
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 consumption.
Additionally
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, there are other activities no less important that comprise the other half of
electricity
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 consumption,
for example
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, the use of ovens, lighting, or vacuum cleaners. In conclusion, it makes sense that during the winter the use of
electricity
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 is higher than in summer, the use of heating rooms and heating water could be the main reason for
this
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 result.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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