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Many employees may work at home with the modern technology. Some people claim that it can benefit only the workers, not the employers. Do you agree or disagree?

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Working from home with the help of telephone lines, or,
in other words
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, telecommuting has become very popular especially where internet connections are fast and reliable. I
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 disagree with the given statement that it can benefit only the
employees
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 and not the
employers
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. Telecommuting is a win-win situation for both
employers
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 and
employees
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. There are many advantages of telecommuting to
employees
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.
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 with, it saves time as no time is wasted commuting to and from the office. It
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 saves money as no spending on private or public transport has to be done.
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Furthermore
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 the worker can look after family commitments like dropping the child
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 school etc.
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 most of the work done by tele￾workers is monitored, still a few minutes can be snatched at times.
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, the
tele-worker
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teleworker
can do some side business side by side.
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 there are many advantages to
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.
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, less office space is needed as the workers are working from home. It is a fact that land prices are exorbitant and it is very expensive to build large offices. Not only building but maintaining offices is
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 very costly.
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, it has been seen that
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 take less sick leave and other leaves.
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 is
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 beneficial for
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. It would be worthwhile to consider why some people opine that telecommuting is not beneficial for
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. They argue that supervising
tele-workers
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teleworkers
 is difficult. Statistics have proved that telecommuters take pains to work well from home as they realise the benefits it has for them. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, telecommuting benefits both workers
as well as
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employers
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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