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The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table shows different sources of fuel for producing
electricity
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 and their
percentage
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 use in five Asian
countries
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 in 2005. Generally, the five
countries
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 showed a significant difference in their patterns of consumption. Taking nuclear fuel first, Japan had the highest
percentage
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 at 49%, with South Korea
second
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 at 33%. In marked contrast,
Thailand
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 used no nuclear power at all. Turning to Coal and Lignite, Malaysia and Singapore used
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 to generate a large proportion of their
electricity
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 (61% and 42%, respectively), a much higher
percentage
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 than the remaining
countries
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. Regarding Petroleum products,
Thailand
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 produced 36% of its
electricity
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 from
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 source. In comparison, the other
countries
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 only generated 3% or less of their
electricity
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 from
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 fuel.
However
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, Hydro and Wind reveal another pattern with South Korea producing almost half of its
electricity
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 (48%)
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 way (over twice as high as
Thailand
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 which had the
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second highest
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second-highest
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percentage
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 at 19%).
Finally
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, a significant amount was produced from other sources with three
countries
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 (Singapore,
Thailand
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 and Japan) generating around 40% of their
electricity
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 from other fuels.
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, it can be seen that there was a significant variation in which fuels
countries
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 used to generate their
electricity
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, percentage, countries, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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