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“Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

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Nowadays, the internet has become the most used forms of
communication
. Most of the people forgot to spend
time
 with family and friends because they are habituated to modern
communication
 like email and messages.
This
 resulting in many negative effects in people's social life, in fact, it is affecting the
face
 to
face
communication
, through which we could learn sympathy, values and many more. Though, people are living in the same house with their parents, but they forgot to communicate with them in person. The main reason for
this
 is an increase in technology. In past decades before the technology got taken up, people used to spend
time
 with their friends and family and there was lots of verbal
communication
 between them.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, verbal
communication
 with our loved ones makes us feel better and reduce lot of stress. At the same
time
, we could
also
 understand their feelings and emotions.
On the other hand
, it is not only affecting the personal life, but it is
also
 affecting their social lives. Social gathering is nothing but spending
time
 with friends and teachers, where we could learn new things and things happening in the world.
In addition
 to
this
, most of the institutions using a modern form of
communication
 with students, which result in damage in their studies. Previously, classes were talking
face
 to
face
, and students who were having doubts were explained clearly in front of them and make them understand perfectly. But, by
this
 modern
communication
 most of the students facing problems, in understanding the subject. In my opinion, modern
communication
 is good, but until and unless it doesn't affect our personal lives. Use the technology in the right way, where it improves our knowledge but doesn't damage it. Social gathering and friends are much more important to every individual out there.
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