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In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society?

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It is true that in some countries there is a shortage of students opting for
science
 courses.
While
 it is necessary to identify the possible causes of
this
 trend, it is
also
 necessary to predict the effects on society. I believe that there are at least two major causes of the lack of appeal of
science
 subjects.
Firstly
, many schools and
college
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 are behind the times and have been slow to dismiss traditional ideas that girls should not study
science
.
This
 sexist attitude regards the study of
science
 as a traditional male preserve,
thus
 it is time for university
science
 faculties to abolish selection procedures based on gender.
Secondly
, subjects
such
 as business and management are attracting growing numbers of students. Many young people consider that the job prospects in these areas offer the greatest financial rewards and the best chance to move up the career ladder. There will be serious effects on society if more students do not choose to study
science
 subjects. In terms of the environment, one result will be a lack of trained professionals to find solutions to urgent problems,
such
 as the need to conduct research into alternative energy sources and to help society
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achieve sustainable development.
For example
, more scientists will be necessary to lead the fight against climate change and to meet the enormous challenge of global warming. From the perspective of health, another outcome could be a lack of qualified researchers to search for a cure for life-threatening conditions,
such
 as the increase in degenerative illnesses like Alzheimer’s disease, as people live longer.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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