the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The given six pie charts demonstrated the
water
usage of six different regions of the world (North
America
, South
America
,
Europe
,
Africa
, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
)
on
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three types of use (agricultural,
industry
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industrial
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, and domestic) which represented in percentage.
Overall
, the
used
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use
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of
water
for
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in
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South
America
Asia
and
Africa
were
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was
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mostly for
agriculture
,
meanwhile
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North
America
and
Europe
had
the
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a
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similar portion in terms of industrial and
agriculture
. There
were
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a
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apply
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minimal
water
usage for domestic use in all six areas of the world. North
America
and
Europe
was
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were
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the two
region
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regions
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that used
water
on
main ly
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mainly
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agriculture
and industrial use with almost half for North
America
(48
percent
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per cent
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) and 53
percent
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per cent
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in terms of factory and
agriculture
used of a number that exceeded 30
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per cent
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percent
with 39
percent
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per cent
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for North
America
and 32 for
europe
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Europe
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. In terms of
water
usage in South
America
,
Asia
, and
Africa
, the biggest proportion
were
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was
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water
used for
agriculture
with
the
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a
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percentage that exceeded three
fifth
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fifths
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for all of them 71
percent
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per cent
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for South
America
, 84 for
Africa
and 88 and 81 within
Asia
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe, africa, asia, agriculture, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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