he graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

he graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how much energy was consumed by US residents since 1980 from a 2008 report projecting until 2030. As can be seen, there are an upward trend in energy used with the exception of
Hydropower
and
this
trend is predicted to continue in the future.
In addition
, the volume of petrol and oil consumed has registered the highest data which is projected to peak in 2030
while
Hydropower
has displayed the lowest data which will bottom in the
last
given year
according to
the prediction. Fossil fuels including petrol and oil, coal,
natural
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and natural
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gas have been the dominant type which will maintain
its
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their
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position in the future. In 1980, the amount of petrol and oil stood at 35 quadrillion units, ascended slightly by nearly 5qu to reach 40qu in 2008 despite
of
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apply
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the fluctuation. It is expected that will continue to increase more significantly by 10qu to hit 50qu in 2030.
Similarly
, Coal used in the US is expected to rise considerably from 15qu in 1980 to 30qu in 2030.
Likewise
, 2030 will see a remarkable growth of 10qu to reach 25qu in 2030.
Besides
, all categories of natural resources
such
as nuclear, solar/wind,
hydropower
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and hydropower
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stood at 3qu in 1980,
however
,
while
nuclear and solar/wind
are
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is
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predicted to rise slightly of 5qu to reach 7qu and 2qu to reach 5qu in 2030,
hydropower
will remain unchanged albeit some fluctuations in accordance with the projection
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hydropower, qu with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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  • energy consumption
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • sustainable
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • biofuels
  • hydroelectric power
  • solar energy
  • wind energy
  • trends
  • increases/decreases
  • shifts
  • milestones
  • significant
  • forecast
  • implications
  • sustainable development
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