The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different places in Bangkok. Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different places in Bangkok.

Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In 1980, the art gallery
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at 20%, afterwards, the percentage of art gallery visitors reached its peak at around 39% in 1985, and
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it sharply declined five years in a row. It steadily plunged to approximately 21% in 1995 throughout the end of the period.
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was the highest rate of all the
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, from around 23% and 48% in 1980 and 1995 respectively.
Then
it dramatically hit a low of around 35% in 2000. After that, it decreased throughout the end of the period.
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