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Solving environment problems should be the responsibility of an international organization rather than each national government. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that only an International agency has the power to address environmental problems, causing serious threats to human's life.
However
, I think that protecting our planet is res
ponsibility of
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the responsibility
 both the international
organization
 and each country's politician. On the one hand, there are several reasons why tackling env
ironment pr
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environmental
oblems should be responsible of an international
organization
. There are some big environmental issues
such
 as: global warming, the gre
en house ef
a building with glass walls and roof; for the cultivation and exhibition of plants under controlled conditions
greenhouse
fect and violent storms to be effectively sol
ve, w
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solved
hich requires the efforts and cooperation of governments or an environmental
organization
. In fact, it takes many years for studies to collect the number of samples and analyse huge amounts of data, which helps know the major causes of global warming and find the most effective solutions to deal with
this
 problem. Only an international agency could have sufficient funds and resources to invest in
this
.
On the other hand
, I believe that it is necessary for each national government to solve their own environmental problems. Every nation has different environmental problems, which results in nee
d fo
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the need
r different approaches and solutions.
For instance
, while some developing countries give priority to clean water to people, industrialized countries are more likely to concern about air pollution. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that protecting the environment is the obligation of both every national politician and an international
organization
.
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