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Some people provide financial assistance for retried, unemployment and disabled citizen . In other countries, families provide support for these people .Discuss both view and give your opinion

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Government
play
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plays
 a vital role in any country.
Although
 when people are getting at the
age
 of
reterimemt they
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retirement, they
retirement they
 are financially aided by
government
.
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.
while
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While
 some
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 think that
money
 should be safe by people during their working period.
This
 essay will light on both views and provide my own
opinion I
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opinion, I
 think that people should helped by
government
 at old
age
 who are unable to do
work
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the work
.
However
,
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,
some people believe that it is
duty
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the duty
a duty
 of
government
finacailly
from a financial point of view
financially
 help people
at
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in
 old
age
.
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.
Nodoubt
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No doubt
 people pay all taxes to
government
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the government
 when they are
work
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working
in
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at
 Young
age
.
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.
So
,
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,
at the
age
 of that when they are not able to work they supported by
government
. Because of, people put efforts in the development of
country
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the country
a country
.
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 now it is
government duty
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a government duty
 to look people at the old
age
.
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.
For
examy
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the exam
exam
,
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,
in many foreign countries
government
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governments
 give pension every individual person
at
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of
 their pension
age
 so they can run their bread and butter easily and
fullfil
put in effect
fulfil
 their own medical facilities.
On the other hand
,
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,
some people think that people should save their
money
 for old
age
 so they can easily run their life without any tension. Definitely,
government
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the government
have
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has
 so
manye
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many e
 responsibilities of
nation
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nations
a nation
the nation
 like infrastructure
,
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,
medical
etcetera
. So people can start saving when they earn.
such
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Such
 as
,
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,
my father and mother have a joint account in which they are save their
money
 for the old
age so
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age, so
 that they cannot depend upon anybody for their old
age
. By
this
,
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,
people can easily enjoy their life. To encapsulate, as I earlier said people should save own
money
 for
future
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the future
.
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.
people
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People
 have different opinion regarding
responsibility
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the responsibility
 of old
age
. I
am support
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am supporting
 that the
government
provide
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provides
 financial support are more helpful.
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